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like drowned men who have lost their
clothes and faces, they lay suspended
facing the sun and grinning without
eyes through the ripples of the water.

those passing by wonder how they got here,
these homeless men without fingers or toes
long spindly stumps twisting into lost roots:

reaching to the east, to the south,
to the homes they have forgotten.
about roots that are visible through water in the ditch. i am not quite sure why, but they make me feel sad each time i drive past them.
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roots by ~the-balcony-scene plays on emotions we have for fellow human beings, our past homes and experiences to leave us to grieve for the everyday objects and occurrences we encounter deserving of our empathy. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
:blackrose: Your lovely poetry has been featured here: fav.me/d6ogtjc
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautifully written and crafted into a poem which I believe to be one of the best I have read. Truly outstanding ♥!
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the-balcony-scene Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
thank you very much! ♥
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IAstartov Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
I like the words you used and metaphors. Great work!
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is such great writing. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. I enjoyed your use of imagery, detail and personification. Congrats on a more-than-deserved DD.
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happygirl224 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful. Congrats on the DD!! :happybounce:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
This is a really beautiful moment.
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RuisuRuisuDance Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lovely. <3
Congrats on the DD! :D
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Congrats on the DD! Lovely thoughts! :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day! : )
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Lovely writing. Congratulations on your D.D!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome imagery, I haven't noticed this in a while (hey, it's winter), but I'll have to keep a lookout now.

Was there any particular drive behind the choice of east & south directions?
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
in all honesty
this is incredible
i know just what you're talking about
and your metaphors are spot-on and deliciously sad
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the-balcony-scene Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student Writer
oh goodness. thank you so much ♥
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011
you're welcome!
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ElyOfIce Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student Writer
I can almost feel the pain while reading this, very well done.
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the-balcony-scene Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student Writer
thank you (:
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ElyOfIce Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student Writer
Your very welcome!
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